we sit across the table,
and our gazes are the only things that touch
somehow we know this is how it must be
bound close as atoms in their spin, yet
destined to move like comets, flashing
briefly then continuing through the black
I need you here,
need your gravity to keep me steady
the pull of you balances everything
and yet we are lost, you retreat from
my heart at the speed of light, i cannot
even find you now within the endless skies
and so our gazes touch
across the miles contained in inches of space
bridged only by our mutual thoughts
and i think to myself, we
are alone in the universe
brooding
not just something that you think sounds moody, i want you to get pissed and ready to punch something and then sit down and bash the keyboard for 15 minutes. submit it. dont edit at all.
ive looked over a dozen or so of your pieces and they all have the same basic theme, and almost all of your submissions are either emotional or romantic. kick the habit and start new.
... nahh, just kidding!
(actually, i feel that there should be an 'I' before the 'need' in the 8th line... but s'alright
definitely one'a my favorites nonetheless...
~ there is no cure for what plagues our society, stupidity
what a perfect metaphor you've chosen as well - the comet. so beautiful, ethereal, mysterious, yet only comes rarely in our lifetime. you've definitely captured the perfect image to embody the spirit of this poetry.
i feel weird now. your poetry is not only beautiful, but powerful as well. it moves me to reminisce my own experience with the one i thought to be "my comet"...
i need a hug now.
+gaston
where light falls there is suffering
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Where light falls there is suffering
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mastermind
damn.
and YOU of all ppl KNOW i can relate to this as it was my own shatter-resonance.
nice work you two.
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