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Months: February by °euphoria:iconeuphoria:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional




If wishes were snowflakes,
then I'd be responsible for the wonderland
outside, piling up almost as fast
as the words being whispered from lips
that miss the taste of you.

This, the shortest of months,
stretches out before me longer
than all the others combined;
for you will return at its end
to a heart that longs for your warmth.
Twenty-nine days, a month unfinished
yet neverending.

Just as we are.
©2004-2009 °euphoria
:iconeuphoria:

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It is time, you see.

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`nemish Feb 1, 2004, 6:44:38 AM
There is a need, a yearning here, you can really feel it. Subtle yet a very strong emotion. I like the flow you have here as well. It works. :)

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:iconbuildingclimber:
=buildingclimber Feb 1, 2004, 6:53:28 PM
excellent expression of anticipation.
:iconmaxrom:
~maxrom Feb 2, 2004, 11:54:09 AM
Very nice piece. :hug:

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:pointr: This is the point where you look over my stuff :pointl:

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:icondelphoric:
~delphoric Feb 2, 2004, 12:02:00 PM
Excellent idea presented in the first stanza, however you kind of loose the uniqueness in the second stanza. Unfortunately the second stanza is rather boring which is disappointing given the stanza that precedes it.

Forgive my frankness if this is too forthcoming.
:iconkindred:
`kindred Feb 3, 2004, 7:44:25 AM
I like it muchly! I was actually hoping for another poem about the seasons like you do, but hey, i'll take what I can get ;)

Well done, and I really liked the part about the snow flakes and the wonderland outside. Very well put together!

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If dreams are like movies...
Then memories are films about ghosts.

~Kindred~
:iconkernos:
~kernos Feb 3, 2004, 7:50:48 PM
very beautiful love poem. i particularly like the way you compare the month of february to your love. very nice.
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~mastermindg Feb 6, 2004, 7:04:32 PM
i like the first part very much, great imagery, but i think it could use a little work. second bit may work better as prose, while the first in blank verse. all in all, though, i like it.

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:iconportamento:
~Portamento Feb 8, 2004, 12:09:48 PM
...touching. great use of imageries.

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...you've bled me of my emotions.
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