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what would happen
if i traced the words
i want you
on the back of your hand
pushed my chair just a bit closer
and let my knee
barely touch yours
under this table

what would you say
if my eyes lingered at your lips
and saw myself kissing them
before lifting my gaze to match your own
and bringing the corner of my hungry mouth
up oh-so-slightly
just enough to tell you what I'm thinking

what would we do
if the strap on my dress
slipped down my shoulder
of its own accord
and i left it there
curling around my arm
just like i want your fingers to

what would happen
if i invaded this space between us
gave you the chance for only a fleeting moment
to touch me as I hope you want to
would you let me in
or would your fingertips drop to the band
golden around your finger
twisting it slowly
as you walk away
©2002-2010 °euphoria
:iconeuphoria:

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Just a little thought. Written in 3 minutes as an experiment with a brain explosion. =) (Smile)

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:icondreamz13:
Wicked ending that forces me to take a step back. I was practically led on by your spellbinding words, and yet cruelly rejected away at the very last step.

What would happen?

My mind will explode.

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:iconsummerdies:
So vividly described and flowing like the subtle motions of the portrayed moment. Sensual and evocative (written in three minutes!!!?) with images painted so well with words. It plays like a movie in my head. Great twist at the end. Great poem overall.
:icondraxull:
Instant fav.

Imgs. flashing thue my brain.... So vivit so real, like I AM there.... hoping U will let the strap fall.... Let the beast aweke.... be.... BE.... And then the poem ends.... :( (Sad)

I woot like to know wat you kan do in 6 min.s :) (Smile)

Take care.

See ya. :) (Smile)

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:icondeejbard:
and i know from experience that some of your best words come on the spur of the moment.

you set it up perfectly ... the beauty of the seduction, the bittersweet ending. +fav , dear friend.
:iconjsenn:
oh
now i know your mama taught you not to tease these men. They really aren't good at resisting. Hey that's what my Mama told me! Ha! you probably didn't expect them to be so easy ...or... so hard to resist. Uh, I think that is all I have to say right here. Your poem is beautiful, is beautiful really is so compellingly beautiful and nobody writes seduction like you ms. kit.

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:iconnamaste:
packs a powerful punch, like all kitpoems. gorgeous, seductive, and yet aching at the same time.
you rock. :) (Smile)
:icondarkphoenix:
*sigh*

(and I mean that in the nicest possible way... :-) (Smile) )

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:iconbreid:
Yeeks - that last verse. Changes my whole perspective of the writing. Nice twist.
:iconsasso:
As I was reading this, I pictured myself sitting there in a theatre watching an old romance film, and as the scene was unfolding, I was becoming more and more smitten, with that lovee dovee grin on my face, feeling the love ooze out of the screen.

And then the record player screeches to a halt. The band is twisted, and anger rushes to my mouth as I scream at the screen "Damn! You fool!"

With this roller coaster ride, a definite +fav

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